Comments ( 3 )

1. Violet DoolittlePosted on 8:39 pm September 22, 2021

   I enjoyed how you delved into a darker subject matter for this poem, not restricting yourself to ordinary topics, much like we discussed in our class regarding 'Rat ode.' I also admire how you've successfully handled a more complex rhyming scheme and poetic form. I particularly like the rhymes between "wiggles," "giggle," and "squiggles;" it almost added a playful element to a dramatic scene.
2. Brandi CrugerPosted on 9:48 pm September 22, 2021

   Hi Chantal! I loved your poem. I typically struggle with my interest in poetry as I have trouble understanding it. Your poem has a lot of imagery which helps with my ability to understand. Each line seems to connect, as does each stanza, yet they all sound the same. The poem as a whole reminds me of a movie or a play, due to the fact that there is that presence of imagery. Overall great poem, I liked it a lot! I look forward to reading more of your work soon!
3. Jennyfer HidalgoPosted on 12:01 am September 23, 2021

   I had to comment on this poem because I liked it a lot. In my poem, I too attempted at a dark theme. Loved the contrast in the dark vs the playful with your choice of words like "wiggle and squiggle". Your use of imagery makes me feel as though I am in the room with them and it brings me chills.