Nightmare

One night, I had a nightmare I can never forget. 

It was the middle of the night when I awoke to a wretched stench oozing out of my closet. The most vile smell was undecipherable, like an unknown substance even the top scientists couldn’t identify. All I knew was, something was dead. Ah, I remember: that stupid raccoon that made its way through our roof vents. He must’ve gotten stuck!

I opened my eyes, flinching from the bright yellow light spilling through the crack of my bedroom door. It was late. I looked towards the menacing closet door in apprehension. All of sudden it burst open, thunder striking through the ceiling, and all I saw was my father’s dark silhouette, a body bag in his bloody arms. I stared in horror, and for a second the lightning brightened his face, although I couldn’t make out his dark expression. He swung a pistol from his right hand, and I heard my mother’s screams die out in seconds as he shot the bullet, the next bullet splitting through my older brother, the last penetrating my sister’s skull. My whole world crashed down and I could no longer feel my own throat from the way I was screaming. 

I woke up with tears streaming down my face, and my heart beating out of my chest. I stayed there, lying down on my bed, my throat somehow parched, for almost ten minutes. 

 

Comments ( 3 )

  1. Marisa Montalvo
    The descriptive language used in this story is amazing, I also love how simple the first sentence is, it already gives the readers knowledge of what the story will be about. Great job!
  2. Brandi Cruger
    Hey Tahsina! I loved your story! Like Marisa said you used a lot of descriptive language and that added a lot to your story. I didn't think to use the memory of a dream/nightmare, so I commend you for coming up with such a unique idea.
  3. Maria Giraldo
    I enjoyed the detail and language you used, especially at the end where you descried how you felt waking up. I think we all share similar feeling and reactions with we have such horrible nightmares.

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